Lol wow, all the compliments from you, yoou make me blush!!
So, what I'm gonna do is paste your story in this and where I arrange the grammar I'll put it in bold so you can see the mistakes k
Lol I love helping people with their stories and stuff
“Bill - Billy where are you?” I call, moving swiftly
through the rooms of his enormous house. I know he is
here somewhere; I just spoke to him on phone an hour ago. I know he is playing his silly little games
with me, like always . My lovable Bill. If only I could tell him how I loved him, life could be a lot easier than what
it is at the moment. I move into his room in
hopes of seeing his bright smiling face, I see no one
“Billy where are you?” I ask the silence, hoping the wind will carry my voice to him.
I begin to
worry as I can't find him anywhere and instantly feel angry for shouting at him on phone.
“Billy please don’t be mad,” I sob, and look up, dreaming of him coming towards me. His image
vanishes and I
break down into silent tears. I could feel turbulence in my head because he was not there. My mind
refused to believe that he could’ve gone somewhere with Tom.
Just then I receive a call from Tom “Is Bill with you?” he inquires
“Nein.” I reply, the only German word learnt from them.
“He is not picking up his phone”
“He is not at home. I
searched through all the rooms.”
I lie down on the garden grass after
ending the call with Tom and close my eyes.
My phone rings again, this time
it is my annoying boyfriend, actually, ex, because I had broken up with him the previous day, but no one knew it yet. I curse under my breath and pick up the call
“What do you want jerk ass?” I shout
“I may not be such a jerk ass if I tell you that your friend is attracting a crowd,” Jeremy replies and I know
he is referring to Bill, and I don’t feel good.
I run to my car and
break the speed limit to reach the ten
storey college building we all studied
at. Bill stands on the roof looking , to me, like an angel from heaven. I push through the crowd and look at him. Even at such a distance I talk to him with my eyes, begging him not to do anything. Tears as thick as blood flow down my cheeks, he does not return my look anymore. I know it’s my fault that he stands up there. I call Tom and run into the building, skipping three steps at a time to reach
him faster. I fall bruising my knee, but I still run. My limbs begin to hurt as I defy all the screaming in my head, asking me to halt. I fear Bill jumping and it keeps me going. I miss a step and hit my face on the stair. Thick warm liquid pours down my face. I touch it, slowing down a little. I feel pain in my cheek as I feel the cut, but I don’t care. I can't. I have to stop Bill, my sweet Bill from leaving us. At last I see the roof door and push through. I sigh as I see Bill still standing there. I run, out of breath and out of strength, but I need Bill more than my own heart to keep me alive.
“Billy” I whisper “Please don’t Billy.”
“Why not?” he asks not looking at me.
“Because I need you Billy.”
“You do not. You have Jeremy don’t you? Everyone has someone. Tom has Rachel, you have Jeremy, and I don’t have anyone. I don’t want anyone, I want to be gone,” he cries. His accusation hurt me
more than daggers
could. I let
a sob escape and make up my mind.
“I love you Bill Kaulitz,” I say standing inches away from him. I don’t want him to fall. If he did, I would
follow him.” Don’t leave me Bill, I want you. I need you, and if you jump, I’ll jump too.”
He stares at me. “You love me?”
“For a long time now. I don’t even know since when.”
A tiny tear trickles down his cheek again. His dead eyes show signs of life. I rekindle my hope, and tell him again that I love him
“Please Billy, we all need you. Think of Tom. Do you want to leave him like this? He loves you more than
life itself – can you leave him guilty for what you do?”
He turns on the parapet slowly; one wrong step and everything could end. I gasp thinking he
is going to jump, but then see him look at me.
“I love you too,” he says, smiling
“Please come down Billy,” I beg, holding out my hand. “Please give it a chance, give me a chance”
He touches my hand
which is cold due to the fear in me. I feel his warmth, I feel relief. He stands on the same ground as me, I barely
reach his chest. I curl my arms around him, crying. “Please don’t leave me”
He touches my skin softly, running his hands
along my cheeks. I feel peace inside me. The turbulence fades. I feel his grip again, he tells me not to worry. He tells me he loves me too.
My tears freeze. I clutch him hard. He bends down and kisses my wound.
I gasp as it hurts, flinching and looking down.
“Don’t scare me like that again Bill.”
He
stops me mid-sentence, putting his finger on my lips. “No more words”
I lose myself in his gorgeous eyes as they come closer while he bends. His lips touch mine, and my body submits unto him. He holds me hard and kisses me harder. I gasp for breath as I feel the heat in my body. Never had I felt any emotion as much as I did then. Our lips collide again with force as I tell him I love him, tears flow down my eyes. He lets go of me and smiles. I see the
light in his face again. The
light I loved to see, I lived to see.
I see Tom open the roof door. He looks sad, yet relieved. He scolds his brother. They hug, tears pouring like waterfalls from Tom's eyes.
Bill hushes his brother and speaks. “She loves me Tom.”
Tom smiles at me and hugs. It
is over, everything
is fine. Bill looks a bit disoriented, but happy. I see the smile again, I am certain he wouldn’t do it, ever.
See, nothing too bad, just a few little errors here and there. On the whole a very well written piece of fiction!
Subject: I LOVE YOU 
Thu May 08 2008, 12:03
it makes me cry.....
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