YOU AND ME

okay so this is the tom story...i wrote it just last night...after the Bill story. its not as sad as the billy one...but its sad enough. think of rescue me when you read it.


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I sit silently on the bed, not knowing what to do. Jade walks into the room, looking as beautiful as ever and kisses my cheek, asking how my day was.

I lie to her telling her that I recorded in the studio my seventh lie in a week. I feel sick inside. She tells me she would be out for the night with her best friend. I feel glad to not have her around for the rest of the night. I kiss her goodbye and see her leave.

“Bill I need help” I say over the phone after sometime, because he was the only one I could trust.

I do not like the advice he gives me, but it seems to be the only way out. I prepare myself for the next day, being aware that I might lose Jade forever. I love her a lot, but I have sinned. I was at fault, and I deserve to be hated.

Morning approaches fast as I sit through the uncanny silence all night, thinking of my words and her reactions. But I know if there is a fall out, I wouldn’t be ale to take it.
Instead of going to the recording, I wait for her; she comes at last, surprised to see me.

“How are you here hun?”

I hush her down and ask her to sit by me. She moves like a dream and occupies the empty space, leaning her body on mine. I enclose her in my grasp, knowing that it may end soon.

“Are things okay Tom?”

“No love, they aren’t” I reply. She asks me the reasons. Reasons I don’t want to give.

“I cheated” I say, holding her tight. Our intertwined hands loosen as she takes herself out of my hold. I close my eyes, feeling it approach.

“What do you mean?” she asks innocently, knowing perfectly what I meant.

“I wasn’t loyal, I cheated on you. I deserve to be hated” I reply past a lump in my throat. I want to cry but I hold onto faith.

She looks at me with peace, balancing the chaos in my mind. She speaks to me in a tone I don’t recognize, her words as cold as ice. “Why Tom?”

“I am sorry and I am ashamed. I lost control over myself. Please forgive me”

“Since when has this been going on?”

“A week”

“Oh I had thought longer than that” she dismally reacts

I give her an inquisitive look. She responds to it. “I am not blind Tom, I knew it all along. I was waiting for you to tell me and today you did.

I feel foolish for not realizing that she knew. I feel worse than I already did. She knew it all along, yet she said those loving words to me every day, still she kissed me while I made love to another woman. I hate myself on the inside. I apologize, not able to meet her eyes.

“I forgive you” she says.

I think I hear it wrong so I ask again

“I forgive you Tom, just for this once, because you told me the truth.”

I don’t believe my ears. She was forgiving me for being a bastard. I stare into her brown eyes, as she seats herself again next to me on the couch and takes my arms around herself. I feel lost, but I like her touch. She kisses my hand as she tells me she loves me.

“Do not forgive me so easily love, I deserve to be hated.”

“You ask me for something I can't do Tom, I love you too much” she replies and leans again on my body to reach my lips. She gives me a passionate kiss, I feel as if falling through a dream, fearing of crashing on a hard ground, but falling on feathers.

I return her love and hold her tighter, my way of apologizing and assuring her that it would never happen again. I thank Bill inside for helping me.

“I love you so much jade, thank you” I say, feeling her body slither on mine as she shifts herself onto me. She smiles shyly and reaches for my shirt. I sit up and let her remove the first one, then the second one. She kisses me silently on my face then onto my neck. I open her hair, letting it tickle my skin, as it falls on my body. She curls her legs around my waist as I get up and move to the bed. I kiss her on her lips, taking off her shirt before lying down on the bed. She pins my hand on the mattress making me a captive of her seduction. She kisses my upper body, moving her way to my face, biting my neck.

“I love you Tom, but please don’t hurt me again. I won't be able to take it” she says letting me take over her. I kiss her violently again. She moves under me, asking for more.

“I won't love, I promise I won't” I answer pulling over the sheets. I touch her body with my hands, as smooth as a snakes slide. She shivers and closes her eyes, before losing herself in my passion.

lool i bet they slept under those sheet lofl
loved the story
well done!!!!!

hehe nice ending =]]

great as always =]]]

keep it up ^^

Good story, typical Tom fashion, cheating on a girl but it's nice to know he feels bad about it! This is actually a very believable story, though I dunno if I'd be as forgiving as Jade I'd probably have to cut his balls off for being with some other ho!

I just wanted to tell you, be careful about punctuation. A lot of the time you miss out punnctuation, especially when people are talking (like, you forget the . or something). It's nothing major, but just thought I'd point it out.
Also, another quick think, when you have a sentence like:

"No love, they aren’t” I reply.

It's better to write it like this:

"No love, they aren’t,” I reply.

There's supposed to be a comma there. Just thought I'd point it out! I always forget it (or I put a "." another BIG mistake) my editor is always hassling me about it lol.

They're not big things really, just thought I'd point it out to help you a bit

Keep up the great work!

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oh thank you guys so much for reading it...


but Chloe..why is there a need for a comma there? i dont get it...isnt my sentence supposed to finish there?

Pallavi, yes the sentence does finish there but only the spoken sentence finishes there, the sentences itself continues cos then you wrote 'he said'. It's just the way its written because it's dialogue.

This website might be able to explain it better hun (its where I get all my help from) . I hope it helps and I haven't confused you too much!! Sorry hun!
http://fictionwriting.about.com/od/writingexercises/qt/punctuation.htm

hell no, ure like my ultimate helper!...i do see why the comma should be there.....and just for the record if it were myself instead of jade, i would've cut his balls too.

Lol glad you understand why the comma should be there! I'm glad I could help and I haven't confused you at all!!! if you need help in anything else just let me know